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Sunday, 22 May 2016

Scared out of my wits

The door at the Y.M.C.A. slides open and reveals the car park of doom. Oh no, I have seen places like this on tv commercials, usually covered in police tape. This could be bad. I know I should wait for mum at the door. But then I say to myself, I have got the guts to do it on my own. I sneak out and I hide behind our car. I can hear mum yelling out “Tyler where are you, come back!”

The trees cast dark shadows over the cars. I have butterflies in my stomach. The trees look like monsters waving their arms. I shine my torch left and right, then my stupid brother jump scares me by leaping out of the flax bush beside me. I stand up and say “shhhh, I'm trying to scare mum!”. Suddenly mum unlocks the car with the remote, causing a ‘beep beep’ that made me jump out of my skin. Dang, I  have been I caught. Mum can see me in the lights of the car. Maybe I can do it next time.

In this writing I was learning to use scary thoughts in my writing. I have used powerful words like “I jumped out of my skin” because I wanted the reader to be scared out of his wits.
My next steps are to ask for help when I need help.


  1. grat werk tyler on the writing :)

  2. It did make me jump out of my skin if I was there I would be scared as will I love the expression in it all I can say is I love it. Nicholas

  3. I bet that was scary at the time it doesn't sound scary when you read it but it is a great story 😄